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DONALD MASS WRITE TIP #85
What’s your MC’s strongest emotion in your story? Imagine your MC is mute. How does she physically express what’s inside?
Holly draped a leg over the arm of the chair. The white stars that decorated her red boot-shaped slippers practically blurred as her foot moved.
"You’re wondering how I persuaded Mr Merton to give Mum the evening off,” said Sebastian. "I just told him Mum had a bad case of strep."
Holly’s tongue dropped several degrees when the cold air circulated and her mouth refused to close.
"He didn’t fire her!" Sebastian said, "He signed her off for a few days. Unless the medical tests he ordered come back with something properly infectious," he added thoughtfully. "Then, maybe he’ll have to hire himself a new housekeeper. Mum might consider the break as a kick in the career."
Holly raised an eyebrow high enough to trouble her perfect fringe.
"You think Mum’s going to wonder who made the Boss think she’s plagued or something?” When Holly nodded slowly, Sebastian shrugged and rolled out his lower lip. “You were the one who said he'd never realise he loves her until they spend some time apart.”
DO YOU THINK ACTIONS SPEAK LOUDER THAN WORDS?